Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

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Claim: In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years.

Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Success in any field merely depend upon the the leader. The claim and reason prompting anyone in leadership should be changed after a regular interval of 5 years is totally flaw. Some major companies, educational instituions, and even government of country run by a single leadership over a long period of time have given some stupendous results.

First of all, considering in the field of education take the example of Oxford University. This university is famous for it's education through out the world but the most of the leaders of this institute are assigned for a long period. They have played their role in respective fields very sincerely. Also, consider the example of the Reliance Industries of India. This group is run by Mukesh Ambani and he's taking care of very nicely. This compaany was accompained to him by his father and so on he will transfer the group to his son. In this case also the leadership is proven to very successful.

Along with all these also consider the example of the governmnet of China. This country is run by a single man who supports communism and is taking his country to the very summit. This leader of the country is proven very successful and helped China to gain too much development in a very short period of time. His leadership is liked by most of the natives of the country and he is also an example of how a single person handle the most perstigious countries in the world.

Concluding all together, I would like to conclude that the claim and the reason provided in the statement are completely false. It is not the interval of renewble of leadership of any institution that help it to gain success but it's merely the leadership. If the person incharge of any institute is smart and capable of taking care of that institute than there is no need to apply this method suggested in the claim. These are merely false allegations and does not provide any substancial reason that why this method would be going to work. It is possible that the person that take charge after 5 years is not capable enough to run the institute to make it prosper in it's future years to ensure it's success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...Success in any field merely depend upon the the leader. The claim and reason prompting ...
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...Success in any field merely depend upon the the leader. The claim and reason prompting ...
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...e leader. The claim and reason prompting anyone in leadership should be changed a...
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... regular interval of 5 years is totally flaw. Some major companies, educational inst...
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... run by a single leadership over a long period of time have given some stupendous results. ...
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... university is famous for its education through out the world but the most of the leaders o...
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... This group is run by Mukesh Ambani and hes taking care of very nicely. This compaa...
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...in too much development in a very short period of time. His leadership is liked by most of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65873015873 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56884300738 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.754051717 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6842105263 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8947368421 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152936826186 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517186573573 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527505777153 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103292054514 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680020048443 0.0667264976115 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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