The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
The statement claim that people’s primary goal is to have leisure time. People would enlighten their technologies to have more advancement for efficiency; they try to understand which is not a judicious to play a role for work and they will have innovative tenor to change the circumstances that they confront to. For example, manufacture factory made a Camly from Toyota about 10,000 per 2 weeks. To make more valuable and efficient way to produce more in two weeks, there should require higher technologies to manufacture factory. After increasing efficiencies, however, they are not meant to have leisure time for the primary goal of technological advancement: the primary goal of technological advancement that they make more technological advancement is to have more comfortable situation in the work, and outside of the company such as customers, supervisor supporters.
First of all, the primary goal of technological advancement is usually to make people who are related to a company, scientific research to be comfortable. They would understand the paucity value that company or studies that they own and this progress will encourage people who are at work or scientific research or making policy, to create technological advancement. Former president, Berack Obama was making Obama Care not just because for his leisure time but his dedication helping to low-income family within nation.
Secondly, the other primary goal of technological advancement is for their customers, supervisors, and supporters. People who are from any given specific field of study is not meant to have efficiencies that will precipitate process, but they are meant to have efficiencies so that their passion show to supporters, supervisors. For example, scientific research needs financial aid for their work; however, if they didn’t show their work and efficiencies, then they couldn’t draw their financial aid from any company or government.
Conclusively, admitting that there can be pros about this statement that technological advancement showing people’s efficiencies would make more spare time to have leisure; for example, about three days of conference, people are trying to get a deal for their profit and then they made a valuable contract at the first day of conference. Then, this will be the case of the primary goal of technological advancement is the leisure time. However, this debate can be much narrowed into only one specific category and primary goal of technological advancement can be two types that should be encouraged as above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'claims'.
Suggestion: claims
The statement claim that people's primary goal is to h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45112781955 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16568042103 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446115288221 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.0700298277 60.3974514979 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.357142857 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.548801297612 0.243740707755 225% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213400212501 0.0831039109588 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130049969637 0.0758088955206 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344083010645 0.150359130593 229% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13646341037 0.0667264976115 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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