" The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time."

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" The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time."

The statement suggest that due to technological advancement in the country it should increase the efficiency of people so by these people will have more leisure time . Now a days there is an wide increment in the technology so by these people can get somewhat safety related to it and they can save their time. As increase in technology there will be new Developmnet in the software, Internet and many all other things.
As we know that in archaic era there were no technology so people were forced to complete their work by themselves and by these they were not getting not much leisure time to spend. Due to increase in technological advancement related to finance, software which are widely used in the market for the competition which the buisnessman and other companies face in day to day life. So as per author suggets that by increase in technology the benefits which will get by technology should increase the efficiency of the people. Let's take an example of United States of America. In ancient time in USA technology was not there so there was not much competition related to other countries in technology department. But as per now scenario USA is widely spread in the departmnet of technology. So by these there is an increase in the efficiency of people.
As advancment in Bio-Technology will cure the diseases which were not solve by the doctors with their hardwork . But as new technology is available with it's help Doctors are able to cure and prevent the Diseases which is too Dangerous for the people. So by these advancement in technology will increase the people's efficeincy and they will get more leisure time to spend. Due to increase in technology people are able to buy any products which they want by sitting at home from online with the help of an Internet. Due to these advancement in technology helps people to save their time and as well as the fuel of the vehicle which there are using.

As there in an increase in the computer technology, Expectation of the Employer will be more from his Company in which he is working because they will think that if they gets the benefit of new computer technology than they can complete their work too speedily and the can get some leisure time for them. As there is an adancement in technology there are different software available for different working material so by these people get more efficiency for doing the work and complete in less time.
In final I suggest that as there is an increase in the advancement of technology people should get greater efficiency and gets benefits of new technology which is available in the world. So by these people will get some more time to spend and can do any other work what they want to do in their free time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
The statement suggest that due to technological advancement i...
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Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...these people will have more leisure time . Now a days there is an wide increment i...
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Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
...se people will have more leisure time . Now a days there is an wide increment in the techn...
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Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...eople will have more leisure time . Now a days there is an wide increment in the techn...
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Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...more leisure time . Now a days there is an wide increment in the technology so by ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, Internet and many all other things. As we know that in archaic era there wer...
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Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ther companies face in day to day life. So as per author suggets that by increase in ...
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Line 2, column 534, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... increase the efficiency of the people. Lets take an example of United States of Ame...
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Line 2, column 859, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n increase in the efficiency of people. As advancment in Bio-Technology will cur...
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Line 2, column 859, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n increase in the efficiency of people. As advancment in Bio-Technology will cure ...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'solved'.
Suggestion: solved
...y will cure the diseases which were not solve by the doctors with their hardwork . Bu...
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Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...solve by the doctors with their hardwork . But as new technology is available with...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advancement' or 'these advancements'?
Suggestion: this advancement; these advancements
... is too Dangerous for the people. So by these advancement in technology will increase the peoples...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advancement' or 'these advancements'?
Suggestion: this advancement; these advancements
...ne with the help of an Internet. Due to these advancement in technology helps people to save thei...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l of the vehicle which there are using. As there in an increase in the ...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...ng because they will think that if they gets the benefit of new computer technology ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng the work and complete in less time. In final I suggest that as there is an i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252988047809 0.240241500013 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.141434262948 0.157235817809 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0677290836653 0.0880659088768 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0517928286853 0.0497285424764 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0458167330677 0.0444667217837 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.159362549801 0.12292977631 130% => OK
Participles: 0.0258964143426 0.0406280797675 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6606247877 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0318725099602 0.030933414821 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0996015936255 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338645418327 0.0249443105267 136% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0239043824701 0.0148568991511 161% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2786.0 2732.02544248 102% => OK
No of words: 482.0 452.878318584 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78008298755 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.292531120332 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238589211618 0.280924506359 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174273858921 0.200843997647 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109958506224 0.132149295362 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6606247877 2.79330140395 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 219.290929204 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.342323651452 0.48968727796 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 38.6102143215 55.4138127331 70% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.3684210526 23.380412469 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.532077526 59.4972553346 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.631578947 141.124799967 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3684210526 23.380412469 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.263157894737 0.674092028746 39% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.21349557522 326% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.2273422145 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.83333333333 1.64882698954 111% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245650061683 0.391690518653 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.149580324982 0.123202303941 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0881778244788 0.077325440228 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.58966792131 0.547984918172 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134479974483 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133623281379 0.161403998019 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802107015946 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.572056885836 0.385218514788 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0556055388177 0.0692045440612 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206881158385 0.275328986314 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398578065118 0.0653680567796 61% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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