Prompt: Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing a field of study in which they are unlikely to study.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing o

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Prompt: Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing a field of study in which they are unlikely to study.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing or supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

hoosing a field of study should be interest-based and self-decisive rather than compulsion from other as it has more to do with personal interest than being compelled to do so.Going to study a particular major in the institution is a self-based decision in which the interests, weakness and strengths of one's abilities are put into check.

When someone is passionate about something (course of study inclusive), all the person's attention and concern is devoted to the thing but in case of compulsion, the thing is just being done for doing sake. An instance of this is a person who plays the guitar excellently right from kid and has become so passionate about it,

it won't be surprising if such person opts for music as his major in college but he's being compelled to take up a lucrative course such as engineering. The passion won't be there anymore as there's no connection between his course of interest and this new option he's asked to take up.

Although, it's a responsibility of educational institutions to orientate young minds, the choice of pursuing a particular field of interest irrespective of the success-level attached to it is solely the student's. Dissuading students from taking up a field of interest because their success in that field is not guaranteed, is like compelling them to go against their dreams and goals. To achieve one's goals and dreams, there is a need to brace up to face challenges along the way as these are parts that make up a success story. This improves a student's zeal to be great in life and self-decisive rather than succumbing to pressure and forces tackling his/her goal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... interest than being compelled to do so.Going to study a particular major in the inst...
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Suggestion: one's
...he interests, weakness and strengths of ones abilities are put into check. Whe...
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...hing course of study inclusive, all the persons attention and concern is devoted to the...
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...d and has become so passionate about it, it wont be surprising if such person opt...
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...g. The passion wont be there anymore as theres no connection between his course of int...
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...on hes asked to take up. Although, its a responsibility of educational institu...
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...inst their dreams and goals. To achieve ones goals and dreams, there is a need to br...
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...ake up a success story. This improves a students zeal to be great in life and self-decis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 276.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88405797101 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92230079646 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56884057971 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 704.065955056 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4123526858 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.5 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5 23.4991977007 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113428009055 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478844331162 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503041733159 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622692687789 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050749811117 0.0667264976115 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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