Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problem in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The scandals have been imminent in political, academic to other fields. We have been shocked recently by Facebook Cambridge analytical data privacy scandals where millions of user’s data was stolen for manipulating political activity. In academic area, the college admission process scandal rich people bought admission for their children in elite universities. Such a big news can draws our attention to problem which we have overlooked. I agree with statement that scandals can serve to reveal large problem that society or community should address. On the other hand ,Scandals are also distract us from the major matter of society.
First of all, Scandals play significant role in addressing such big problem which are overlooked by people. For example, the scandal in data privacy was not emerging suddenly due to malevolent activity of technology. We are using different mobile application in our day to day life and every application needs permission to resume. Once we granted permission all this application start collecting sensitive information from our mobile such as credit card information, personal photos, PIN number. So then some times this application will use sensitive information for misuses and such that this data privacy scandal may happen. On the other hand, scandals expose such issues and call for solution to preventing from happening again.
Other characteristics of scandal is far-reaching influence. For data privacy example, use millions of user’s data for national or international political event will hurts whole population. Additionally, on hearing scandals in academic every one feels unfairness because the goal of education is to serve every one as equal. Therefore, right to pursuit knowledge get damaged .However, because of the communication technology like internet these scandals are wide spreading easily to the large section of society which is not possible by single speaker or reformer.
Even on societal level, scandals can serve chiefly to distract from the major matters. For example, several year ago in my city ,the chancellor of a university expelled from office for misusing university’s funds to renovate their own residence. Moreover, this scandal distract university community from major issues of university such as affirmative action and campus safety, focus on education curricular etc.
On the other hand this scandals also hurt the spirits of the people. For example, scandals in political may distrust people from government. People change their attitude and they less trust then before.
Conclusively it can be said that scandals definitely bring attention to major issues. A scandals however focus on what has happened and it is human nature to learn from past mistakes. Therefore, scandals not only expose social problem but also for collectively efforts on finding solution.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51369863014 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85552555372 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543378995434 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3071616067 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.52 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 5.13820224719 370% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192279367089 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581117167484 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271407217586 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105725075072 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334818221242 0.0667264976115 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.