School policies should be based as much on what employers want as well as what students and teachers want.
it is obvious there are three main members of schools, which are employees, teachers, and students. The remaining one is the head of the school or other authorities that control the policy and profits from schools. Therefore, school policies should focus on the wish and benefits of the major amount of members that are employees, teachers, students because of the three following reasons.
To begin, the school running well significantly depends on the work activity of the employees. With the high working effectivity, the operation of school can run smoothly. for example, in the French schools, protests happen with high frequency because of unsatisfied employees with policies of schools. As a result, the operation and all other activities of learning and teaching of schools were frozen. If this situation prolongs, hardly do students and teachers can complete their duties at school. this example clearly demonstrates that the right and wish of employees should be put in considered when school policies established so that they can focus on their work at school and complete successfully, which contribute to the overall success of school later.
Second, teachers play an important role in the operation of school. Its success or failures always partly effected by the teaching activity of teachers. hence their desires should be carefully estimated as formulating policies to ensure that their can devote their all passion on teaching, and emilate all worrying about their rights abused. For example, some teachers believed that they were underarted in comparision with other nearby schools. hence instead of concentrating their energy and efforts in teaching students, in construct interesting and attractive lessions, they spent it on searching for another job opportunity with higher salaries, which eventually caused to the declining teaching quality of school on overall. hence it is clearly that teacher phay an important role in the operation of school, hence, their desires their rights should be magnified clearly in school policies.
Third, it is undeniable that in the age of students- orientated schools, the requirement of students should be put in the foremost considerations, especially, in the school policy. following the recent statistics from Harvard University, it claimed that most students choosing a school to enter based on the policy of that school. does it require to pay a high school fee, but provide a little outside activities or little gymnastic activities ? does their payment are utilized effectively on the purpose of educating ? hence in order to attract more students to the school, the administrator should release policies whereas student's right was emphasized.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, second, so, therefore, third, well, whereas, as for, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49643705463 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84321593359 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489311163895 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.299463977 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.7 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225419777222 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766280399266 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578962792282 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151030790998 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448976359775 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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