Schools should do more to prepare students for the non academic aspects of adulthood Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, be sure
to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position

The overall development of students in school paves the way for them to succeed in life. If we zoom out and look at the bigger picture, life is not just about academics, it revolves around a number of different factors which include addressing real-life problems, good communication skills, elegant personality, work ethics and values, dealing with success and failures, and determination to achieve goals. The schools should not only focus on teaching how to work, but also stress on how to make a living out of it, so as to make everyone self-dependent in their life. In my opinion, I strongly believe that the learning provided in schools should focus more on non-academic aspects of adulthood for three reasons.

There is a reason why the age group of people going to school is termed as "learning age". This is the time span where the children are raw and the teachings in school molds them into a shape which they are going to pursue throughout their life. For instance, if a student learning in school just focuses on the academic part and his learning mainly includes the bookish knowledge and exam-oriented studies, then he might contend well in the school, but as soon he steps into the real world, he is prone to failures. This is because the world doesn't require people who can write perfect grammar or who can solve complex mathematics on finger-tips, instead it requires people who can address the issues faced by society, using the knowledge he has acquired in school. The above example illustrates that the schools should not only focus on books but also emphasize how to apply them in real-world scenarios. This will prove to be a boon for an individual in his adulthood as well as contribute to making the world a better place to live.

Learning academics can make you best in knowledge, but not the best in business. For instance, consider a business school teaching MBA to a pool of students and they mostly focus on the academic part and not much about the overall personality development, public speaking skills, ethics and values of the workplace, etc. In this way, they might flood out a number of gold medalists into the market every year but because of the lacking skills, the degree holders would not be able to stand out when it comes to real-life marketing. A person may build the best product for the crowd, but if he doesn't know how to interact with the crowd and how to sell that product to them, that high-graded degree won't hold any water. This example suggests that the schools should prepare their scholars for every aspect of life so that they don't have to suffer in their adulthood.

The world is now rapidly shifting its focus on entrepreneurship. According to the studies conducted recently, all the developed, as well as developing nations in the world, are giving more attention to creating job creators rather than job seekers. But, to be an entrepreneur, to run a business successfully, one needs to be a good strategist, he should pursue the qualities like finance management, good communication skills, dealing with other employees of the business, handling all the ups and the downs coming in between, etc. All these traits are not a part of academic studies. Hence, considering the given example, schools need to consider all these aspects in their teachings, so that they can have a heavy number of unicorn founders on their achievement board.

Of course, some may argue that academics are more important in schools as only the personality and moral values of students would not let their work stand out anywhere. However, it doesn't answer the fact how all these skills are important for a person in order to succeed in life and to achieve their goals. Schools are the most fundamental in establishing this foundation for their students. Hence, they should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, for instance, of course, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 58.6224719101 164% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3239.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 662.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89274924471 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07241172033 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71924848091 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468277945619 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 971.1 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5342583233 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.958333333 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230572682267 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746781150584 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756720589945 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137510649157 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536535055858 0.0667264976115 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, as to, for instance, of course, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments