Schools should do more to prepare students for the non academic aspects of adulthood Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing

Schools should not be limited to academic activities in the development of students, focusing on non-academic activities is also very important in the overall development of students.

The skills learnt from those non-academic activities could contribute in preparing them for adulthood and life as a whole. Some of these non-academic activities might include sports, debate clubs, drama, dance and music clubs among others. Skills such as advocacy and communication could be learnt in the debate club, qualities such as resilience, teamwork could be learnt from sports. All of this qualities are important for adulthood.

Also the performance of a student in non-academic activities could help in making a better career decision. For example a student that is very good in the drama club will probably do well in theater arts, a student that dose very well in the game of football will do very well as a professional footballer. In some schools, football club is formed in schools as a means attract more children to go to school.

It might be argued that these non-academic activities will serve as a distraction to the students, as their attention might be divided. While these might be true, the importance and advantages of non-academic activities on the overall development of a student is more than the disadvantages.

In conclusion, schools should have more non-academic activities so as to prepare students more for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1242.0 2235.4752809 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 234.0 442.535393258 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30769230769 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12735264644 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 215.323595506 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478632478632 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5583168934 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.909090909 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211867016563 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101463722528 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816076582373 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151903094135 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887495995561 0.0667264976115 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 100.480337079 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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