Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

Since life is a miracle and all is dependent on each other in the nature, it is reasonable for society to make efforts to save endangered species. However, human activities which potentially result in extinction of those species are aim for our economic development which is an important part of social development. Thus society should consider how to realize sustainable development, saving endangered species which are necessary for ecological balance and at the same time keeping economic development which is a basis for people's life.

Life is equal and we human being is just a part of natural chain, however, the original vulnerable ecological balance is being destroyed by our greedy and ignorance.Under the humans' power, the ecological balance that the nature organized for several billion years has been broken. More and more species are in danger to become extinct since many human activities which have detrimental for species such as deforestation, land reclamation, killing of animals... For instance, the matter of oil spill in gulf of Mexico, ignoring the international community's strong condemning Japan's killing a large number of whales ... All these lead more and more species in the ocean to become extinct.

From the industry revolution, although people have a powerful strength to change the nature for economic development, what the following are various forms of pollution such as air pollution, water pollution,solid pollution and so on. All these bring a large detrimental effect to the earth where people depend on to live. And people are revenged by the nature: air pollution has a bad effect on people's health; the climate's always changing make people uncomfortable; the trend of submerged land as the sea level has been rising threatens people who live near those lands to give up their homes...

However, sometimes people have to do these activities for economic development which is a basis for people's better life. Look back to agricultural era, compared to the industrial age, there must be much fewer endangered species, however, people that time did not have such a good life as people in the industrial age accordingly. With the development of times, people tend to live a better life and at this progress, to some degree it is necessary to do some activities which potentially result in extinction of some species. Take forests as an example. People used paper which made from forests instead of using heavy bamboos to record things. It had more detrimental effect on endangering forests, however, at the same time it was more convenient for people to record things. In fact, it is an inevitable trend from agricultural era to the industrial age and to some extent it is inevitable to pay the cost of scarifying some species.

In conclusion, to some extent, it is reasonable for society to make efforts to save endangered species which are necessary to ecological balance, since it is because not only that people should not deprive any species' right to life, but people's life also depend on this vulnerable ecological balance. However, it is an inevitable trend to develop economy to live people a better life which sometimes must pay the cost of scarifying some species. The best way is to make a balance between them, thus making the development be sustainable.

 

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, look, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2779.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12730627306 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86479701198 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440959409594 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0884699519 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.95 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201648001899 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733193469223 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724887087345 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140805292198 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968781182956 0.0667264976115 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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