Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Humans have always been competing against each other for resources, status, partners since time immemorial. this has led to competition being ingrained in our cultures and socieities. competition is something we cannot avoid if we want to be successful in life. thus, I mostly disagree with the prompt statement that we should be instilling in our young generation a sense of cooperation and not competition.
we have to face competition in every aspect of life and it is something which helps us to grow and emcourages to be better than other people. competition is everywhere- take our schools for example. we may encourage cooperation among students all we want but when it finally comes to exams, students will always try to outscore each other to get the best grades possible which will help them secure admissions in good universities and so on. it becomes evident that we only have fixed number of seats in good colleges and the number of students always outnumber those seats available. thus, we need to encourage students to be score better grades in order to secure their future.
Additionally, the competition does not stop after we graduate out of schools and colleges. it is natural that people will always try to outsmart each other for managrial positions in companies. if a person enters into corporate life, he will have to compete against very motivated and smart people for good positions in companies, else he will fall behind in the corporate ladder. there is unimaginable amount of competition in the market as well. if a person starts a company, he not only has to provide good services to its customers, he will have to compete will other companies who will leave no stone unturned in order get their competitor's product out of market so that they can all the market share.
However, there are a few exceptions when people have to compromise and cooperate with other people. In a democracy, the leaders have to be cooperative for the government to function properly. if a person only thinks about its own interests, this will be hurtful to the country and can prove disastrous for the democracy in the long run. Consider the case of a country like USA, which has a diverse population. The leader of that country should be cooperative so that the grieviences of all races, genders and people if different demographies are heard.
In a nutshell, competition is unavoidable part of life and those who avoid it must do it at their own peril. In order to succeed in life, one has to compete at every step, whether it is school, university or office.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79090909091 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69318085922 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470454545455 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 440.0 23.0359550562 1910% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2108.0 118.986275619 1772% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 440.0 23.4991977007 1872% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 73.0 5.21951772744 1399% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311117092131 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.311117092131 0.0831039109588 374% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166405359577 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784097625004 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 221.1 14.1392134831 1564% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -375.12 48.8420337079 -768% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 174.9 12.1743820225 1437% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 28.33 8.38706741573 338% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 61.0 11.8971910112 513% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 178.0 11.2143820225 1587% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 175.0 11.7820224719 1485% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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