“Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.”Write a response in whic

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“Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.”Write a response in whic

Undoubtedly, art majors have many positive factors which can influence the life of human , as it can placate the nerve system of the body according to doctors and psychologists. So, it becomes mandatory for the authorities to devote adequate amount of budget to the aesthetic fields in order to help them to progress ,how ever there are some of the people who point out that financing the arts by the government can vitiate the real value of it , but I am not totally in favour of this attitude, and in this essay I am going to deal with my reasons.
Firstly, it is true that with the help of art, we can eradicate some of the negative effects of our mundane activities during a day , since nowadays most of us are completely under the tough pressure of significant problems in the society , such as fiscal problems, social circumstances etc. Thus, the art such as a music masterpiece can make you relax in a short moment, and I think that would be sufficient to renovate the energy supplies in the body and begin again.
Secondly, it is vivid that different people have various outlooks regarding diverse things. For example many of the youngsters may decide to become an artist in the near future wheter that would be a well-paid job or not, they only wants to realize their dreams , and achieve to success. However, they may find some huge barriers on their way like the disapproval of the parents , and lack of the financial support. As a resultant, their future might be entirely undershadowed by the impediments that are beyond their controls and of course it is up to the government to champion the young proportion of the society , in order to heighten the cultural knowledge of the dwellers.
Moreover, the art have this power to efface the conflicts exist between the societies and make them much closer to each other.
In summary, it is irrefutable that the art may lead to an amalgamation of positive influences for both people and the society , and that would be a wise enterprise for the government to rise the amount of budget devoted to the art , and the artist , because that can have fruitful effects for the cultural future of the state.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in summary, of course, such as, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69576719577 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65938795553 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.3487548878 60.3974514979 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.5 118.986275619 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.7 5.21951772744 339% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178409087139 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669199441603 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439744491935 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102111183911 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378858756292 0.0667264976115 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 11.8971910112 231% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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