Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.Write a response in which you

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Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented

The art and its profits has always been a controversial issue. It can help to improve mental ability or force people to think in different views and ease their mind after a overwhelming day. In order to flourish the art some people believe that the government should fund for that while some claim the intervene of the government could destroy the integrity of the art. I could not completely agree with the funding of the government and it really depends on the economic condition of the country which I will discuss now.

In the developing country that there are lots of dearth in different issues like health infrastructure, water supply, recession and high unemployment rate, funding the art looks like an luxury needs which can be ignored. For example, spending lots of money for international music ceremonies or festivals which could spend for building a hospital or improve water supply system of the country really seems wasting money. This process not only do not tempt people to the art but also may lead to disappointing from the policy maker and chaos.

In developed countries where the all necessary needs are provided by the government and the economy has flourished, funding the art could have some benefits for people. Although some support of this funding, some claim this trend due to intervene the government which may have some biases is detrimental. So, the legislators may just support some artists that has specific point of views. This demonstrates to artists to follow specific view if they need fund and lead to deteriorating the spirit of the art.

Another option to support the art is the wealthy persons which may fund the art without any special purpose like Bill Gates or Warren Buffet. They could provide some contributions for artists and they can pursue their interests. This money would not supposed to spend for other possible constructions and they would not request them to follow an specific policy.

In conclusion, although the governmental funding could help the art to flourish, in fact this money could used in another purposes in the developing countries which may be more beneficial. Also in developing country, the government may intervene in the art purpose which can destroy the spirit of the art.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
...fferent views and ease their mind after a overwhelming day. In order to flourish ...
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...t should fund for that while some claim the intervene of the government could destroy the int...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun dearth seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of dearths'.
Suggestion: lots of dearths
...n the developing country that there are lots of dearth in different issues like health infrast...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...oyment rate, funding the art looks like an luxury needs which can be ignored. For ...
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Suggestion: suppose
...e their interests. This money would not supposed to spend for other possible constructio...
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Suggestion: use
...t to flourish, in fact this money could used in another purposes in the developing c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, really, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01333333333 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67774498827 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485333333333 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1725899578 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380425678851 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136412110828 0.0831039109588 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11278861667 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231465472332 0.150359130593 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880471571726 0.0667264976115 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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