Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Children are prone to adapt what they see and hear in everyday life. That's how they end up learning and adapting to the environment they live in. Violence in media might be a concern for people in the society getting influenced by it, but children on a daily basis are more prone to the influence of their peer groups and family.
A child's mind is very adept at learning new concepts, their power of observation is very strong. That's the reason they end up learning things that they are not even taught explicitly. Children tend to imitate what they see subconsciously. Even if they have been taught that violence and fighting in intolerable, what they observe and notice will have more influence on their development as a person.
Parents are the first point of communication for children, they are the ones who interact with them on a daily basis. So, naturally the child is more affected by what's going around in the house. If the mother is a victim of domestic violence, or the child's parents quarrel a lot every day, that's what the child sees every day. He will be more prone to violence because he doesn’t know otherwise, he might think that all parents are like that. The same goes for the peer groups that a child is a part of. He will see and emulate whatever his friends are doing, even if it is just for the sake of fitting in. If he doesn’t take part in a fight with them, they might chide him for being a coward. Also, the increased competition these days might be a factor too that might make him resort to violence when it comes to friends. So, a peer group significantly affects a child's behaviour.
Media might also have a significant affect on a child's perception about violence if the child engages in activities that often involve social media, news etc. Looking at the current scenario of the world, news channels are always talking about numerous cases of violence and other atrocities all over the world, while newspapers are filled with bombastic headlines that tend to attract readers like "Terrorist attacks kill 45" or "Man kills himself over rejection". This no-filter way of reporting does intent to attract the attention of even the most oblivious reader, be it a child or anyone else. But how often do we hear of a 10 year old reading the newspaper or changing the channel from a cartoon to watch prime time news? So, in the end it all comes down to how much exposure and access the child has to these media sources.
Therefore, we can conclude that a when it comes to increasing violence among children, a child's tractable mind is more influenced by the people around him i.e his parents, family and friend groups rather than other sources like social media, newspapers or tv shows because of the difference in the level of exposure to both things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, while, as to, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2316.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67878787879 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55813260889 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49696969697 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5274527676 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.272727273 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21233302093 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621851528146 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715646484123 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138686286249 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698410958224 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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