In todays's fast paced world ehich is evolving at an ever- increasing speed, the rise of media has had an impressionable effect on each one's life- be it children or adults. The prompt proposes two views about the influences on society and moreover children's behavior, which although independent, are not contradictory. I agree with the view that the media has an unquestionable imprint on children and adults of this generation, for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is an undeniable fact that this is the age of social media. The availability of smart phones and the internet in general has steeply increased children's exposure to the outside world. Consequently, the youth of this generation is very much aware of the violence and unstabilities prevalent in the society. For instance, through various mediums of media such as the fairly recent video content and blogs posted online, children are aware about what is currently happening, with little or no filtering. To further this, news about political unrest and wars are posed to them with brutal details that are not healthy for their age group. One can only try to restrict the amount and type of information their kids receive, but the truth is that once a device is handed to the children, there is no control on the influx of information. The above example can leave a negative impact, and in some ways have an effect on the children's mental development, increasing violence amongst the society, moreover children.
Furthermore, media is viewed as not only entertainment, but a primary source of information to be abreast with events through out the world. In fact, one consumes information about the behavior and actions of other people without any active retrospection about its aptness. Naturally, one does not completely analyse the information they receive, especially children. For instance, if a celebrity has had a recent public outburst, one may likely believe that such behavior is acceptable. The end result is that media does not necessarily inform about how appropriate certain actions or activities are, and the society simply replicates the same without any due deliberation.
Nevertheless, children's peer groups and parental role models are also a high influence on children's behavior. This immediate environment is the source of the validation they crave. On one hand, idealistic parental behavior may mould the child to have a strong value system, but the contrary could be true if the peer group is a negative influence. For supporting examples, one need look no further than a simple case of contradiction wherein a simple fight with a classmate is encouraged by a child's peers, but severely criticised by parents. In this case, what will the child do? Is he remorseful for his actions, or has a snse of validation from his friends? In sum, both the views are true in having an impact on a child's behavior. However, t is clear that media has a more long-lasting and severe impact on the society as a whole due to its unfiltered nature. This can lead to formations of opinions and character traits, ones that can be very difficult to change.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...f information to be abreast with events through out the world. In fact, one consumes inform...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, for instance, in fact, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 518.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03281853282 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89879698429 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530888030888 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 824.4 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4717141433 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.625 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266988771949 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702725619241 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808739217528 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153853944216 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462236929736 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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