The lives of sports and movie stars are ones of humungous interest and intrigue to the general public. To say that one simply looks up to them is an understatement. in many cases, these starts are idolized by the public. The prompt claims that in return of the millions of dollars paid to them, it must be expected of them to behave and carry themselves as role models for the youth. In my opinion, I disagree with this sugegstion and argue that they must not be indebted to do so, however acknowledging the fact that they have a strong pedestial in the society, for three main reasons.
To begin, it is imperative to understand that most of the movie and sports stars have worked their way to this position where they are viewed with such admiration. In most cases than not, they are completely deserving of the remuneration they are paid, since this fame has been in the works for several years. Thus, to say that they are expected to behave a certain way in exchange for the money they are paid, indirectly debases their hardwork and persevarence over the years to fame. For instance, Neeraj Chopra, an Olympian gold medalist for javelline, started in the most humble setting of life, overcoming a multitude of hardships to reach this stage today. So is it fair to tell him now that he is obliged to behave a certain way? I believe not.
Furthermore, these celebrities are just as human as we are. To admire them is one thing, however to put them on such a high pedestial that they are considered almost God-like is not appropriate. Consequently, to vest in them the power to unquestionably influence the youth can prove to be severly detrimental in the long run. To elaborate, if a sports star is promoting an energy drink with concealed health hazards, the unaware and naive youth is likely to get highly infulenced and consume the product based on the testament of the star.
However, it is highly important to identify that this power is given by the public itself hence it is in the best interest to moderate this indirect control. This "obligation" can be perceived as their authority on the public, hence must not be encouraged. However, it is essential to understand that they youth today is most influenced by these stars, even more than their peers, parents, or academic heroes. Consequently, it is of utmost benefit if these stars project themselves in positive light, such that the youth learns and flourishes by looking up to them. For instance, Tom Cruize's campaign in the past regarding the importance of leading a fit life had created a row on social media, encouraging all to take part in a fitness challenge. Research continually shows that young adukts are most likely to absorb hard-hitting information from those who they admire. Thus, these wealthy influential starts, must in fact take it upon them to guide the young people.
Of course, there is a very thin boundary between expecting the stars to behave a certain way, and holding them accountable for not doing so. Although such projection of behaviour from stars must be appreciated, it must not be forced upon them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... humungous interest and intrigue to the general public. To say that one simply looks up to the...
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Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... looks up to them is an understatement. in many cases, these starts are idolized b...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...dmiration. In most cases than not, they are completely deserving of the remuneration they are paid, sinc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, regarding, so, thus, for instance, in fact, of course, in many cases, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2573.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78252788104 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77801955649 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514869888476 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3114922091 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.208333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29166666667 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398181630698 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987034679307 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761790101008 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222559416609 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793344301023 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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