Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
It is true that chldren imitate what they see. Their surroundings have a strong and profound effect on who they are and how they behave. And both media and their peers have an influential role in determining children's behaviour. I believe, that while media is responsible in shaping how the children behave, but the influence of peer groups and parents is more profound.
If the only thing the media broadcasts is the violence going on in the world then it is sure to leave a wrong impression in the minds of the young. For example, if the media constantly shows how a druglord is evading arrest even after commiting several murders, a may child think that the reason that they are at large and can not be stopped is because they are powerful. When a person sees that threats to lawyers, for instance, can change the verdict of a case, they may naturally assume that with greater power of fear factor they may get away with any indescretion. How world is portrayed, what aspects are hilighted and how they are hilighted also makes a big impact on what impressions it leaves on the young. I agree that it is media's responsibility to show what is actually going on in the world, but they can stop exaggertaing facts and make a point to not only show but also criticise wrong behaviour.
On the other hand, if a child has abusive parents who beat him, then the child naturally assumes that beting people is acceptable. If the father indulges in domestic violence, the child too will consider that hitting women, or anyone weaker then themselves is allright. Thus, if children have violent friends, they naturally tend to become increasingly violent themselves, because violence is what will get them accepted in the group. If they choose to be more bovine, they are frowned upon by their peers. If they choose not to indulge in drugs while all their peers do, they are ridiculed. There have been several cases where a children started a browl as they were cajoled into doing so. They might have friends who praise them if they beat some one up, or abuse someone.
However, if their peer group believes in helping people, and if their parents teach the children not to engage in violence, and if the parents practice what they preach, it is much less likely that a child will turn violent irrespective of what the media shows. The child will have role models and peer circle which frowns upon wrong doings, be it stealing or drugs or violence, and thus they are more likely to refrain from indulging in such things.
Hence, it is imperative for a child to be in correct company, as it is the prime factor which will influence how they behave. If a person has good company, then other factors will have less negative impact on the child.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...groups and parents is more profound. If the only thing the media broadcasts is ...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weaker than'?
Suggestion: weaker than
... consider that hitting women, or anyone weaker then themselves is allright. Thus, if childr...
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Line 5, column 629, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...ed. There have been several cases where a children started a browl as they were cajoled in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65979381443 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42981970668 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472164948454 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6035484195 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16097278151 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570435229221 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677429895896 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102366641568 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062211699977 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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