Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Nowadays, the technology has become more connected with the people's daily life. An individual live in contemporary society can hardly live without any technology equipments. however, some people suspect that the use of technology harmed the everyday communication between persons. Actually, in my opinion,the new electric equipments enhanced the quality and convenience of communication.
Nonetheless, sometimes, we have to admit that the abuse of new technology damaged the bases of human interaction. The emerge and widely use of cellphone and internet could be a revolutionary issue for this century. but when it brought merits, it also brought the new challenges for humanity. As more and more recreation applications are available on different mobile platforms, like youtube and mobile phone games.Such overuse of those apps extremely distracted people's attention, and addiction, especially for teenagers. this kind of distraction and addiction could cause the decline of daily talks between individuals.
however, except the abuse of technology, the technology itself could help people enhance the quality of communication only if people who use if treat it right. For example, the email and internet chat room played very significant roles in today's socialization. Compared to the old ways, like mail and telephone, the new ways of communication made the information transmit faster and more effective. but, this effectiveness requires us to use technology in a proper approach. For instance, when we use computers or phones to work, we need to remember what exactly is we want and complete it, instead of roaming without targets on the internet. the appropriate use of tech demands our attention.
if we do not have such quality of reminding ourselves not to get lost on the internet, the communication would be largely impaired by the technology, because the useless information on the internet is as much as the useful ones. the useless information like recreation news, fake news and trash email would lead us astray, and take up our time for our daily life.
the technology could be useful for communication only if we use it right.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3875739645 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0871090503 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562130177515 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8131041402 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.166666667 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277873403361 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088909989095 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639738301745 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160112154477 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510864063598 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.