The surest indication of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people
Every nation aspires to be called great. This is why the government plans, strategizes, and most importantly implements the best methods towards achieving national success. Here, the speaker prefers a more holistic approach to judging whether a country is great or not, which I strongly agree to.
Admittedly, achievements bring prestige to the nation. In the world of sports for example, Brazil up until today maintains a high record in the game of football because of their constant exploits in the world football championships. The United States and Jamaica continue to fly high on the tracks of the Olympics, which in turn gives the nation a widely celebrated prestige. Due to this, the government consistently invests in sporting activities and developments of the sportsmen to ensure that these high records do not diminish.
Also, a look at the scientific research industry would delineate the relevance of quality research for international participation. Countries like the United States which possess state-of-the-art equipment for quality research continually draws the attention of other countries for studies or research partnerships. For this reason, the government does not deter to invest in the research laboratories of colleges, institutes, and universities.
However, it is not enough to refer to a nation as great because of the achievements of some of its citizens like rulers, artists, or scientists. First, who makes up the nation? The nation is made up of its citizens of which only a negligible fraction may have achieved such reputations worth celebrating. What is done when a nation is judged by only an insignificant fraction of the populace is gross misrepresentation and falsehood which must strongly be discouraged.
Secondly, regarding a nation as great when a huge number of its citizens are only trying to survive not only dents the image of the government to its people, but also proves that the government has no regard for the led. In such situations, more attention is placed on these high-flyers than to the common man. This means that basic amenities like food, shelter, and housing may not be provided for the less privileged, while the achievers are given preferential attention and treatment.
Furthermore, the falsification of the actual state of nations stifles the opportunity for foreign aid and interventions. Organizations like UNICEF, which are focused on helping the poor and marginalized may rather focus on other nations that are not great, while the obvious reality indicates that great nations are only living behind a misleading façade.
In sum, it is right for a nation to celebrate the achievements of notable artists, rulers, or scientists, but the actual state of a nation is indicated by the welfare of a majority of its citizens rather than only a few individuals. Hence, I restate my strong agreement to the recommendation of the speaker.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27370689655 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13746843762 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528017241379 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2354541535 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.523809524 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210416232 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668098276031 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706052740039 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113734096526 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655406418591 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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