The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of
its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting
your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true
and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Whether a nation's greatness could be evaluated by the general welfare of its citizen rather than the achievement of scientists, artists, and rulers could be weighed in many aspects. However, the claim is problematic since the author fails to specify both "general welfare" and "greatness" in the first place.
Admittedly, the author's claim might appear to have considerable merits. After all, providing well-established general welfare should be one of the cornerstones in any modern country. Yet the speaker fails to provide a precise litmus test for measuring “a great nation”. For example, despite the Chinese government has been infamous for its illiberal laws and system, its immense market influence still lends credence to its bargaining power on the international negotiation. In this case, although most of the residents are under surveillance, China still shouldn't be ruled out of the lists of great nations.
At the same time, the author fails to clarify the meaning of "general welfare" as well. When we speak of “general welfare”, several terminologies can be put forth: personal welfare like happiness, and public welfare such as safety, public health, and employment. For instance, Korea has a superb public health care system that allows its citizens to pay low or no-cost on most of the domestic medical services while its suicide rate by years tops any Asian country. Given this point, how can we conclude Korea's general welfare of its people?
Furthermore, the achievement of scientists, artists, and political leaders can also give a boost to the nation's general welfare development. There was a myriad of prominent Italian artists during the period of renaissance. These artists' legacy has attracted tens of thousands of tourists from every place on earth and helped bolster the local economy. In this case, individual achievements play an important role in the contribution to the nation's welfare.
In summary, the claim isn't as persuasive as it stands. Although general welfare could be one of the standards to assess a country's greatness, the credits of individual achievements by luminaries shouldn't be excluded from the list. Also, despite fulfilling people's welfare is never the goal of an autocracy government such as China, it's huge impaction on international society is not negligible. According to the expositions mentioned previously, I hold the position that the general welfare of a country's citizens shouldn't be considered the surest indicator of a great nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
Whether a nations greatness could be evaluated by the gen...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...nts are under surveillance, China still shouldnt be ruled out of the lists of great nati...
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Line 3, column 610, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uled out of the lists of great nations. At the same time, the author fails to cl...
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Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
...during the period of renaissance. These artists legacy has attracted tens of thousands ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...tions welfare. In summary, the claim isnt as persuasive as it stands. Although ge...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...f individual achievements by luminaries shouldnt be excluded from the list. Also, despit...
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Suggestion: shouldn't
... general welfare of a countrys citizens shouldnt be considered the surest indicator of a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47208121827 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11959806496 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583756345178 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8829656561 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.473684211 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227114173502 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674116756966 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486601034785 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129777822129 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173337564027 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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