The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
To evaluate whether a nation is great, various indicators can be applied such as the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists and the general welfare of its people. It is claimed that among these indicators, the last one, the general welfare of its people, is the surest. However, in my opinion, no indicator is surer than another since the judgement of a nation, advanced or poor, will be neither comprehensive nor representative without a wide enough band of standards. Only when various indicators are used can the evaluation be reliable and sure.
When the general welfare of citizens is viewed as an indicator surer than anything else, some major developments of a nation may be neglected. If a nation decides to invest a lot of money into its healthcare system, the number of indicator of general welfare pertaining to health may skyrocket. However, the capitals may be used to support the black hole people leave when they see a doctor too often, rather than to push forward the medical advancement. But this phenomenon may be seen more clearly if another indicator, the achievement of medical researchers, is used along with the indicator of public health welfare. When the medical researchers from a nation win a lot of creditable prizes such as the Nobel prize, this may indicate the budget invested into medical research is high since usually it takes a lot of funds to support a research institute and nurture an insightful scholar. With this addition of indicator, the efforts a nation make to develop medical research system are clearer to see. Hence, overall welfare is not the supreme indicator in the process of understanding a nation.
Surely, the general well-being of citizens is also critical. No importance of personal achievement can outmatch that of public welfare. If the achievement of scientists is viewed as the most important measuring, the whole education system will be different. Less intelligent students being screened out, only the brightest ones are left to receive scientific education. This will lead to lionization of privileged individual, and the concentration of resources and power. Thus, by no means can individual achievement overrides public well-being.
In conclusion, most of the modern nations are changing rapidly and becoming more and more complex. Therefore, various indicators to check public and personal welfare should be used in juxtaposition to each other so that the features of such multifaceted society will not be compressed. Different indicators should be given equal importance and credit. In this way, the evaluation of well-being of a nation can be comprehensive, reliable, and meaningful.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2523364486 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0083043708 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502336448598 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4475273707 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.047619048 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284714830591 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894343762187 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998497138282 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176352961471 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119384158198 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2523364486 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0083043708 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502336448598 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4475273707 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.047619048 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284714830591 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894343762187 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998497138282 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176352961471 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119384158198 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.