The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
The statement asserts that the general welfare of its people is the most important criteria to determine the nation’s greatness. First of all, I do not believe that there is an absolute way to evaluate how great the country is. In order for the country to be great, it takes enormous efforts from various people. Therefore, it is hard to generalize that either the general welfare of the citizens or the achievements of the specific individuals are the most important indication of a great nation because the society does not consist of completely isolated sections.
In a point, the nation exists for its people. We can measure how well the country is developed by the welfare of its citizens. For example, there is a small country, Brunei, located on the island in Southeast Asia. This country is fully funded because of the large oil reserves. People of Brunei can go to school and see a doctor without concerning about the costs since the government covers all the expenses. Furthermore, the nation fully supports its students who want to go study abroad. With all these benefits, there still are people who haven’t heard about this country. Also, because there are controversies about Brunei such as human rights or male and female inequality issue, it is contention whether we can label Brunei as a great nation.
Sometimes, people think that the nation is great for what its rulers accomplished. Great political leaders govern the nation in accordance with one’s beliefs of what is best for one’s country. Moreover, the beliefs of the rules do not simply stay inside the state but eventually have a strong influence on the entire world to become a better place. For example, Abraham Lincoln, as the president of the United States, led a movement for the emancipation of the slaves which marks an epoch in both American and World history. Although the movement triggered the Civil War between the northern and the southern states and the war drained the country of its men and resources, America had become the nation values the constitutional freedom more than anything and Lincoln was named on the list of the greatest leaders.
Additionally, the invention of a great scientist not only glorify one’s name and the country but also improve the public’s quality of life. Innovations in science and engineering are directly related to the general welfare of its people. For example, during the time of the industrial revolution, James Watt of Britain invented the steam engine, which changed the paradigm of the manufacturing industry. The innovation freed the people from simple, tedious, and time-consuming tasks and let them do more creative and valuable work instead for a relatively short time. Thanks to the great invention by James Watt, Britain had developed faster than any other countries in the 19th century and become the strongest and richest country in the world for a few decades.
To sum up, I do not agree with the author’s statement that the welfare of the general public is the surest indicator of the great nation. On the contrary, every aspect of the country is interconnected: science can change the entire system of industry and political leader’s policies may have a great influence on everyday life. When everything comes together, we are able to see the nation as a whole and decide its greatness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, for example, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2820.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05376344086 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77872165719 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503584229391 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 891.0 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8999136441 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.32 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277402978776 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877262110106 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928380452576 0.0758088955206 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172482606935 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729018245663 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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