The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statemen

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The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers,

artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the

statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true

and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The speaker asserts that the surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its elites, such as the rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. From my perspective, the statement raises valid points by claiming that the general welfare of citizens can be representative of a great nation. However, it is too extreme to assert that a great country cannot be represented by its elites’ achievements. Actually, thees two things are not contracting, and both of them can be the indicator of a great nation.

For starters, it is ascertained that the general welfare of the citizens represents indicator of a great nation. A country with a high standard of living of people and excellent infrastructure can be regarded as a great country. For instance, as shown in Maslow’s hierarchy of needs, the physiological needs such as employment, food and shelter, as well as the psychological needs like education and enjoying life should be satisfied primarily to ensure people’s welfare. If there is widespread unsettled starvation or unemployment among the whole country, such a nation cannot be called a great nation. Also, if the majority of the juveniles have not been educated, the country is not a good country. Besides, the establishment of basic facilities can also be a sign of whether the country is great. For example, a great country with excellent people’s welfare usually has perfect medical care and well-built parks and so forth. Hence, people’s welfare can be seen as the symbol of a great country to some extent.

However, we should avoid taking the statement to the extreme. A great country can be represented by a myriad of other factors other than people’s welfare. The achievements of its elites, such as its rulers, artists or scientists can also be the indicator of a great nation. For instance, Bill Clinton, a previous president of America who implemented NAFTA, managed to promote the economic progress and bring about the abundance of the treasury, which paved the way for America to maintain the most powerful country all over the world till now. As for the artists, James Cameron, an outstanding director, can be taken as an example. He popularized three-dimensional movies, which enabled people to uplift visual enjoyment. When we refer to the scientists, Yuan Longping, an eminent scientist in China, can never be neglected. He produced hybrid rice, which dramatically eradicated the starvation and famine in the impoverished countries. All of the aforementioned elites can undeniably represent the indicator of a great nation.

Overall, the statement is valid for asserting that the great nation can be represented by people’s welfare, while it is also too extreme to claim that the surest indicator cannot be its elites’ achievements. Actually, we do not need to make thees two things opposing. On the contrary, these elites’ achievements, such as scientific innovation and social stability, can ensure people’s welfare. Also, the elites consistently occur in the promise of people’s welfare, such as basic survival and liberty of speech.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 943, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, hence, however, if, so, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2685.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30632411067 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21308684974 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45652173913 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 835.2 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.99550561798 280% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7635631852 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.4 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.24 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231264620021 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833202166591 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10302475748 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172314998476 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100938080555 0.0667264976115 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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