To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Using a subset of a larger population to reflect the characteristics of a society will be ineffective. A representative sample of a part of a population cannot adequately inform you of the key characteristics of that society. The prompt recommends that the most important attributes of a society can be studied by using the major cities of a country. I mostly disagree with the prompt for two reasons.
Firstly, one major characteristic that define a society is the culture of people, A huge discrepancy can be seen in the way of life of those who live in major cities and those who live in rural areas of a society. For example, in major city like Lagos in Nigeria, there are a lot of commercial activities, transportation facilities and a larger population that in a rural village in Osun state, Nigeria. Rural areas are more conservative and the way of life of the people differ. Most of the population in a village are engaged in farming, live in huts, engage in lesser commercial activities and are mostly uneducated. One might say that, villages are beginning to abandon some of their traditional organization and adopting some lifestyle of major cities. However, a huge difference can still be seen in the way of life of those who live in major cities.
Furthermore, the socio-economic status of people and the behaviour of people in major cities differ from the population of people in rural areas. People in the urban cities are more sophisticated, educated and exposed. For instance, in a major city there are more schools, access to electricity, access to mass communication. People who live in major cities engage in social activities such as drinking bars, organize social events, form union and associations. These privileges are not seen in the rural areas. People who live in the villages are involved in lesser social activities. The behaviour of people differ in major cities and the environments are not as serene as that of those who live in rural areas. One will notice a better sense of oneness amongst people who also live in rural areas because of their lesser population.
However, the countryside is beginning to be influenced by the major cities, facilities are improving and they are beginning to resemble major cities. For example, pregnant women are no longer nursed by their neighbour’s wives instead they are taken care by maternity nurses at public health centres in the villages, farmers are beginning to form unions and schools are been created also. Villagers are embracing new habits like recreation, education, entertainment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 383, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2150.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03512880562 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01090821612 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426229508197 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4477884801 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.380952381 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239751928081 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743925463906 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073843811959 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151457953208 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832422322633 0.0667264976115 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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