Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
While I agree there should be a mechanism in place where the capabilities of teachers can be assessed in order to erode or weed out bad teachers. I mostly disagree with the prompt that recommends that teachers should be paid based on their student's academic performances for two reasons.
First of all, assessing teachers based on student's performances will give the teachers an opportunity to manipulate the system. For instance, a teacher who know he will be paid based on the academic performance of his or her students will not bother elucidating to the students the entire curriculum as he normally should but will instead intentionally teach students on only the areas that the students would be tested on. Using this mechanism, will only allow teachers to take advantage of the system in place and since students will only be taught on areas in which they will be examined, their academic performances will be excellent but the students themselves will only have a limited overview on their subjects because the teachers will neglect the normal curriculum and just teach them based on what he will testing them on in the examination. This teacher will be paid substantially at the expense of students only having limited knowledge about such courses.
Secondly, this prompt does not take into consideration student competences as well as class sizes. For example, a class size of about 100 students and a class size of 20 students. Do you expect that the dissemination of information in both classes will be same? Of course, NO. A teacher can easily control, manage and pass information in a class where there are fewer students than in a class where the population size is greater. Another important factor to consider is the individual competencies of students. No matter how excellent a teacher is in passing out information and teaching, students have to dedicate personal time to studying what they have been taught in order to excel academically. For instance, the study time of students differ. Some students are more intentional about studying what they have been taught. We don't expect to see the same results for students who don't put efforts into their studying. Evaluating a teacher based on the student’s performance in this case will only be counterproductive.
However, it is important that teachers are given an incentive when their students are doing well academically. This will help and encourage the teacher to do better and more intentional about their students. There should also be a sort of evaluation for teachers, so teachers who are not teaching their students well can be removed from the student. For instance, some teachers are really poor at their jobs and some are even so negligent. Without proper checks and balances, the teachers will remain the system and will only jeopardize the future of students who are taking such courses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, even so, for example, for instance, of course, sort of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2403.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04831932773 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83085019704 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441176470588 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.6698010309 60.3974514979 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.227272727 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448876676751 0.243740707755 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152000446385 0.0831039109588 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129656066223 0.0758088955206 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338209200126 0.150359130593 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921438263862 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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