Argument
Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Judging a person's sedulity and integrity solely based on the targets and results is not a fair indicator. The prompt states that a teacher's salary should be proportional to the academic performances of his or her class. I mostly disagree with the prompt that a teacher's salaries should be commensurate with the academic performance of his/her class. I believe that this amendment might engender more problems instead of solving them.
Firstly, a professional dexterous in some specific field, puts in efforts with diligence and sincerity towards his/her profession, however, the outcome might not be conducive as there are several factors come hampering it. Similarly, it might be unfair towards a teacher to judge his or her performance solely based on the academic performance of the students of his or her respective class. It is a poor indicator of a teacher's dedication and integrity towards the noble profession of teaching. For instance, a school situated nearby ghetto area or bad neighbourhood, would have lower academic performance and high dropouts. As the factors like domestic issues, low economic background, lower attention from parents towards their children etc. influence those parameters. Consequently, no matter how much hard a teacher of that school puts in, the results would not be up to the mark. And, thus the salary of that teacher would negatively affect, despite of his pious approach towards his or her profession. Therefore, it not evenhanded to judge a teacher's performance based on the student's academic performances.
Secondly, this measure of teacher's salary might lead to negative consequences, instead of increasing the academic performance of the students. The teachers in order to earn more, might overdo things which hamper student's development. For example, a teacher might get involved in violence or corporal punishment in pushing the students towards higher academic excellence. However, this might have negative repercussions on the student's psychological development. Apart form this, teachers might be forced to inculcate remedial classes, which would in turn leave students with minuscule time to participate in sports, drama and other extra-curricular activities. Therefore, relating a teacher's salary to the student's academic results would lead to negative effects.
However, some might argue that this amendment would eradicate complacence among the teachers and force them to put in hard work and efforts towards the academic development of a student, and lead them towards success. But this induces a lot of issues, and as per my opinion should not be put into practice. There should a common ground which takes care of both the sides, like introducing perks based on the student's performance and having a fixed basic salary. Thus, a teacher would find this lucrative and won't overdo things to achieve economic goals.
In the end. I believe that it is fruitful to involve perks, rather than salaries, based on student's academic performance. And, this will not be unfair and students will not face any duress as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
Judging a persons sedulity and integrity solely based on ...
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Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...air indicator. The prompt states that a teachers salary should be proportional to the ac...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...tive class. It is a poor indicator of a teachers dedication and integrity towards the no...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...Therefore, it not evenhanded to judge a teachers performance based on the students acade...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., this might have negative repercussions on the students psychological developmen...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'apart from'?
Suggestion: Apart from
...the students psychological development. Apart form this, teachers might be forced to incul...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...cular activities. Therefore, relating a teachers salary to the students academic results...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...es, like introducing perks based on the students performance and having a fixed basic sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2598.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37888198758 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92531564688 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.5749797501 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9230769231 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5769230769 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264527349255 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819542034506 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691001433607 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165591919835 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427278046158 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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