To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Progress and moral evaluation of societies has been carried out from time to time to understand the failure or success of a society. This study helps in creating a better society for everyone else on this planet. The prompt claims that to understand the characteristics of such a society, one has to study its major cities or the ones which are in limelight. I disagree with this claim for mainly two reasons.
If we go by this claim then to understand a society's characteristics we are not undertaking the full aspects by which the society is made. A society from its beginning cannot have some major progress or development which creates some major cities. Every society starts with something small, a small civilization or small village whose people then progress to make the society developed in every front. For example, if we talk about India then most of its people in major cities are the ones who migrated from smaller towns or villages. They are the building blocks of that major city. In fact, the major city would be a village in the past. The values of their ancestors passed down the generations which helped the creation of its major city. In India most of its characteristics can be understood from its villages which have seen ages of ups and downs. Thus ignoring the other section of society will give you an imperfect study which is based on the recent 50 to 60 year history.
On the other hand, if we see that from a different point of view there comes a question that why the villages India didn't progress. Why the people of that region had to migrate? It all leads to two possible answers that the people residing in the major cities were more creative, more hardworking or the city had some natural resources that helped it monetarily. For example, Bihar which produces a surplus amount of coal, which had a very prosperous history is now a living hell for most of the people. On the other hand, Mumbai which was a major port during British time became a major economy of the country. Hence we need to study both the areas major and non-major to understand the people, to understand the culture.
If we assume that claim to be correct then it is like studying the science of medicine but choosing only some certain major areas like cardio. Then we will have no dentist, no physician. One can imagine what a disaster this could make. Hence in a similar fashion we need to study all the areas of a society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... a question that why the villages India didnt progress. Why the people of that region...
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... became a major economy of the country. Hence we need to study both the areas major a...
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...magine what a disaster this could make. Hence in a similar fashion we need to study a...
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... what a disaster this could make. Hence in a similar fashion we need to study all the areas of a soc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, then, thus, as to, for example, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6143187067 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50352172624 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480369515012 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5803830172 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8695652174 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39130434783 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36707086621 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104326181827 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964818413189 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22524267801 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100936025964 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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