Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
The notion that society has become more about self image than seeing the truth behind that image is certainly highly prevalent. Moreover, many individuals hide behind a façade of smiles and phrases, all the while exerting great effort in order to not display their true selves. In my opinion, I partially agree that image has become more appealing than the truth behind that image for three reasons.
Individuals want to have a certain image for others they portray in their lives, never to bring in to full view how they really are. This is done through a myriad of methods, such as social media and photograph filters. We have become completely obsessed with our self image, enhancing our images in order to become an entirely different person. It is egregious to think about meeting someone you met online and finding out they are not the spitting image of their profile picture. The truth being exposed, the individual knows they are not going to build rapport with the other, so they continue to hide behind their generated self online.
Moreover, text messaging validates one’s image once they receive a myriad of texts. It is not so much the content of the messages one receives, but rather the fact they obtained a message, validating their existence. The terror of being known is unimaginable so many retract in their rooms, and find comfort from the validation they receive from complete strangers, may that be from online gaming communities, or a quick like for their Instragram filtered self. This concept of creating yourself against the reality of how you act or look, overshadows and subtly impedes the fact that one can be comfortable with themselves without having to attain enough validity from a complete stranger.
Businesses play on this appealing self as much as individuals strive to be the most popular person on their social media medium. Advertisements specifically hide most of a business’ imperfections by highlighting their accomplishments and consumer items on display. It is egregious to experience seeing the perfect hamburger and French fries meal on a billboard, only to have it presented to you as a half-hearted burger with cold fries. Nevertheless, companies reach many persons’ wallets by displaying cleverly disguised advertisements to snatch one’s attention.
In conclusion, the unfortunate reality that creating an appealing image has become more important than the truth behind that image is prevalent around the world. However, it helps businesses to grow and some to feel appreciated for a few spent moments. Society certainly has become more about drawing one in with much aesthetic rapport than not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ide behind their generated self online. Moreover, text messaging validates one’s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18561484919 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76420491406 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53596287703 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1996019667 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.631578947 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339011965272 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11792965308 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188718519246 0.0758088955206 249% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230599409035 0.150359130593 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.207395892568 0.0667264976115 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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