Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
In the last few decades, there has been rapid and exponential growth in technologies, which has been boundaryless. Human has made technology the integral part of their day-to-day activity and becoming more relaiable and dependant on it. This is creating a problem for society. I totally agree with the statement claim that, now a days people are giving more importance to the appealing image rather than the real self-identity. To explain my stance, I would put forth my view in the following essay.
Technology has made world connected with each other. Now people from any part of the world can connect with other person within seconds. The growth of social media has its own advantages and disadvantages. With the help of social media we can connect with our friends and families, we can stay updated with the latest news and trends, expand our buisness by reaching the global market, and much more. Now a days there are different social media for different roles. Like Instagram is the new age Facebook, where people upload their photos and maintain an online photo diary which they can share with thie close one. Watsaap is other such media which is used to message people and keep touch with people via text message instead of calls.
However, this all advantages comes with a cost. People are becoming so much engage in these social media and creating a perfect virtual life of theirs that they are forgetting about the physical relationships. For instance, on Instagram people only upload the photos in which they look nice and people used different filters, and photo editing apps to look perfect in their photos. People become so stress if they didn't get likes or comments on their photos, and to get more likes sometimes people can even spend money to buy these fake commentents and likes.
Through social media we can earn money and becoming an influencer. Sometimes these influencer do pranks which involves harasssing local public for their views, or doing task in which they put their life’s in danger. These influencers sometimes show a fake life like they have soo much of money and they can buy any car they want. For instance, sometimes these influencers sell courses and say that by just doing this course they become so rich. They try to dupe people to buy products from them which is ethically wrong.
But sometimes creating an appealing image is important, then reality image, because now a days people would judge a person on how many followers one has, and what does its social media looks like. Even before a job interview, the companies check the social media of the applicant. But making a fake one would not be helpful and do any good.
In conclusion, people should give more importance to the real self-identity rather than creating a fake appealing one. As someday people would have to meet the other person physically and their true identity would come in front.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, so, then, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87651821862 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45205546703 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495951417004 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1388437156 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6538461538 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65384615385 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10204071211 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0314477118697 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612079431854 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734078839965 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568487140017 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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