The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitude and interest. You can tell much about society’s ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people
I do concede that in some of the cases, external appearance and dress up of people could reflect general ideas about the attitudes and interests of the people; however in some of the cases, it may not. Observation of external appearance and behavior of people could reflect general ideas of the society; however, it is not always the case that external appearance and behavior of people could precisely portray the real ideas and values of the society. Therefore, I personally believe that the author made an unfair generalization that the appearance and behavior of people clearly depict the ideas and value of a society.
It is true that behavior and appearance of people are some of the tools to study the attitude and interests of the people. However, it cannot be a reliable indicator to portray their real ideas and interests. For instance, in Islamic society, women are not allowed to step outside without covering their entire body parts and so Islamic female often veil their head and entire body while stepping out of their home. However, these usual activities do not mean that these females actually want to hide their body while stepping outside their home. At the same time, there are numbers of Islamic females who are famous celebrities, actresses, dancers, and singers. Apparently the behavior of these female celebrities portrays that Islamic societies are liberal to females; however, these societies are not. Therefore, it would certainly be a mistake to assume the real ideas and values of a society by observing the appearance and behavior of some of its people.
It is true that in some of the cases the behavior and activities of the people could depict general ideas of
and values of the society. For instance, a society in which people perform regular exercise, take healthy organic diets, avoids cigarettes, tobaccos and oily foods reflects that the society is health conscious and gives high value on human health. Similarly, as society in which majority of the people are well-educated, respectful, polite, co-operative, obliging, kind and generous reflects that the society is civilized and gives high emphasis on human dignity. However, on the other hand, in some of the cases, the activities and behavior of people could conceal their real interest, social ideas and values. For instance, apparently a society in which people works very hard each day could reflect that the society gives high value to work, while in reality, their regular hard work could be the result of their dire financial necessity and they could offer more leisure time if they can afford it. Thus, it is not always the case that general activities and behavior of people could clearly depict the real ideas and values of a society.
In sum, it is true that in some of the cases, the activities and behavior of people could reflect the real interest and attitudes of the people. It is also true that in some of the cases, the behavior of people could reflect general ideas and values of the people. However, in other cases the apparent activities and the behavior of the people could conceal the real idea and value of the society. Thus, the study should be made case by case study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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I do concede that in some of the cases, external appearance and dress up...
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...and interests of the people; however in some of the cases, it may not. Observation of exter...
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...t behavior and appearance of people are some of the tools to study the attitude and interes...
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... are numbers of Islamic females who are famous celebrities, actresses, dancers, and singers. Appar...
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...e of its people. It is true that in some of the cases the behavior and activities of th...
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...the people could depict general ideas of and values of the society. For instance,...
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...dignity. However, on the other hand, in some of the cases, the activities and behavior of p...
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...society. In sum, it is true that in some of the cases, the activities and behavior of p...
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... of the people. It is also true that in some of the cases, the behavior of people could ref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, however, if, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2661.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94609665428 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49741993148 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.353159851301 0.4932671777 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5826186861 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.05 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347529933213 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136217151692 0.0831039109588 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741737501457 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221191617247 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052633056238 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.