Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the

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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

50. Government officials should rely on their own judgement rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Since the French revolution in 1789 and the prosperity of liberal democracy, there has been continuous discussion about to what extent the government officials should allow their personal judgement intervene public decision making. Some people argue that the government is purely a representative of the public, and thus should unconditionally carry out the will of their servants. While others claim that government officials have the responsibility to critically examine public decisions based on their own judgement. This essay is going to argue that, to a large extent, government officials should not rely on their own judgement, because personal judgement can be biased, and this stimulates corruption and malfeasance.

Admittedly, there exist circumstances when carrying out public opinions based on majority vote can be suboptimal. One well-known dilemma is the so called ‘tyranny of the majority’. There are scenarios when the will of the majority group indeed violates the right of the minority, the disapproval of homesexual marriage, for instance. In this case, it is crucial that relevant government officials should use their judgement to protect the minority group, otherwise simply carrying out the will of the majority would result in the minority group being neglected and under-represented. Therefore, the recommendation seems appropriate in this scenario. However, this is among the tiny amount of situations when personal judgement of government officials is recommended, and at most of the times, individual judgement has far more disadvantages compared with public wills, reasons are provided in the following two paragraphs.

The first reason is that it is inevitable for individuals to be biased, whereas the public will can be considered as a mixture of various biasedness, and therefore is relatively neutral. This personal bias is well-demonstrated by the tax legislation. It is apparent that affluent people ask for lower tax rate in order for themselves to keep a large proportion of their income, whereas needy people, especially those whose income does not reach the lowest tax line, rely on taxes to obtain social welfare, and thus it is natural for them to advocate heavy taxes. In this case, if the government officials were allowed to judge based on their own considerations, they are probably more likely to accept lower tax rates, as their incomes are not so bad. However, in

doing this, they largely ignores power class people whose lives might be significantly deteriorated by the policy. Alternatively, those officials who desperately need votes might deliberately increase tax rate to please poor people. Yet that might depress the regional economic development, since capitalists are less motivated to make profits. Therefore, in this circumstance, government officials who put their personal judgement into policy making would act in an imprudent way, which can significantly harm the society.

The second reason that carrying out public will is advantageous is due to its prevention of corruption and malfeasance. Most of the corruption happens when companies and government officials agree to interchange power and money. However, if those officials are not allowed to intervene in policy making procedures, their power are seriously confined, and thus there will be far less company willing to bribe them. In this way, although unquestioningly carrying out public wills might sounds cumbersome, it in effect helps restrict corruption.

To conclude, this essay has argued that, to a large extent, government officials should unquestioningly carry out public wills and should not let their own judgement affect their decisions. Because, apart from some very specific circumstances, the potential biases of personal judgement and the risk of corruption makes public rule superior to elite judge. Further studies could be conducted on possible ways to restrict the cons of public rule, for example, ways to avoid the tyranny of the majority.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, apart from, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 12.9106741573 271% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3405.0 2235.4752809 152% => OK
No of words: 613.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55464926591 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10111832606 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 302.0 215.323595506 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492659053834 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1065.6 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9235586617 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.2 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.52 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0483843465715 0.243740707755 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0157858209597 0.0831039109588 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0148942782572 0.0758088955206 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0277819056363 0.150359130593 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00551138162975 0.0667264976115 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 100.480337079 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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