Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
People have different preferences for their directions and goals. While some people pursue immediate success and fame, some others intend to have a detailed plan for the future. Whereas I admit that both ways have to be respected, there is no reason to encourage youngsters to follow the former, which emphasizes short-term results.
As aforementioned, pursuing immediate results is not a problem. Different individuals have diverse standards and lifestyles. Therefore, if some of them consider immediate recognition as the most important matter for life, this opinion should not be denigrated or castigated. They may feel happy to a large extent when they are recognized and it is also possible that they can feed themselves based on their inclination to fame. For instance, some of those may exert to publicize themselves by posting funny and creative videos on websites including YouTube so that they can earn money and fame at the same time. This sort of activity has become prevalent and it is understandable that the desire for fame has become satisfied by new media of the contemporary era.
However, while I admit that a strong inclination to fame is not negative, it does not mean that young people have to be encouraged to follow this inclination. In contrast, it is still desirable for them to make a long-term plan for their future career. In most cases, a stable basis for livelihood and career does not come from short-term activities. In contrast, most fields require a lot of time and efforts to be experts. For instance, being a doctor, a professor, and a pilot requires intensive training sessions for many years, even more than 10 years in some cases. In this situation, becoming specialized in specific fields is not possible by pursuing immediate results. Even in some cases that one jackpot leads to success, there are a myriad of attempts and endeavors behind the scene. For example, many movie stars, such as Al Pacino, became successful because of one specific movie or series. However, they have endeavored a lot to be cast and if they had not prepared based on their long-term goals, they would not have succeeded. Given this circumstance, it is not wise to make youngsters take precarious paths instead of stable fundamentals built by efforts and time.
Furthermore, contemporary society is already filled with a plethora of encouragements to immediate fame and success. Investment in unstable items, such as bitcoins, has allured many people to pursue immediate wealth and concomitant recognition. Besides, video streaming websites have resulted in extreme contents as they can capture many views. Many people just dive into this sort of abuse just because to get fame and success in a short period of time. When this situation is taken into account, it is hard to find a reason to encourage young people to follow this way. If the society is already full of such vibes, it would be better to instruct youngsters to think about long-term goals instead.
In conclusion, I cannot fully agree with the statement that seeking immediate fame is desirable for youngsters. In contrast, it would be better for them to contemplate their future based on long-term schedules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, such as, in most cases, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2671.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06831119545 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83463009376 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491461100569 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 849.6 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7699994628 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.9259259259 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5185185185 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85185185185 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240116236138 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666298520678 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446299514829 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152656874437 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301172163048 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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