Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Recognizing one’s achievements has been deeply rooted since the dawn of human civilization, from the crowning for gladiators winning battles at Roman Colosseum to Nobel Prize. It appears, then, humans are genetically disposed to be recognized for their goods. Compounded by the advent of modern technology, such desire to gain fame has become stronger, especially for young people, since numerous instances of Internet celebrities whose outreach has swiftly extended to a worldwide audience have been cropping up and made many young people wary that fame seems to be readily available and within reach, without much effort invested. Therefore, it does not flabbergast me to learn that nowadays a number of young people dream big, yet they fail tremendously at the same. In fact, admirable dreams do not realize overnight and they often tempt people to tumble, and it is pursuing long-term, realistic goals that enable people to consummate a colossal success.
Real achievements cannot be attained so readily because they more than often demand time and effort. Therefore, setting feasible goals and work realistically toward these long-term ends can often help people carry out their interim ends throughout times and eventually push them towards the acme of their lives. A chimera would be that a novice poet wishes to win the title of Nobel Laureate for his or her first published poem collection. Similarly, a PhD candidate should not anticipate to complete his or her dissertation or yield research results worth publishing simply by doing a couple of weeks or months of research. If one has a certain goal in mind, it would be much easier and wiser to plan out in advance the preparations and requisites needed in order to get oneself near to the goal. For instance, mountain climbers climbing Mont Everest can create different goals such as taking a break at the altitude of 200, 500, and 1000 meters in order to reach to the summit of the Mountain. Who could possibly reach the top of Himalayas in one fell swoop? Even before climbing, mountain climbers need to appraise a host of variables that might influence the climbing, such as logistics, required fitness, the equipment, and the like. The same applies to more quotidian real-life examples. For example, newly graduates can establish short term goals such as spending three years to become the deputy manager, five years the director, and ten years the president. A goal often requires deliberate planning beforehand and failure to understand the accompanying hardship and obstacle of reaching that goal may render one’s eventual failure.
Another advantage conferred by pursuing realistic, long-term goals rather tan their immediate counterparts is that the recognition gained from long-term goals tends to endure. When one probes into the nature of immediate fame and recognition, it is fairly translucent that such recognition is anything but perennial; rather, it is quite fleeting. Granted, by no means does the fame necessarily insinuate that it is attained by pure luck and not by one’s capability. Famous Internet celebrities on Youtube need to orchestrate creative and arresting contents to capture viewers’ attention. However, if fame and recognition are purely achieved by luck alone, then this fame may fade away as quickly as it is achieved. Many eye-catching videos that go viral in a short period of time may have successfully gleaned millions of views, but the fame that these artists have obtained may be put into oblivion a few months after the fad dissipates. Conversely, longing for and pursuing long-term, realistic goals may more likely engender enduring fame. Take Beyonce. When she and her girl group debuted their album at the age of fifteen, they immediately caught everyone’s attention from worldwide. However, they kept training hard on their bodies, their vocals, their choreography, and the like, because they knew that without continuing to expending necessary efforts, they might be forgotten by the music industry and the audience. Even after the girl group officially disbanded in 2005, Beyonce still tops as one of the most important and influential icons in the world by infusing necessary efforts, sacrifices, and diligence into her career. Therefore, only by having young people pursue long-term, realistic goals can they truly realize that the fame achieved via this way might stick much longer.
Dissuading young people from seeking immediate fame and recognition has one important, if not the most critical, rationale: precluding young people from feeling too complacent. Young people, still getting acquainted with social etiquettes and conventions, may readily degenerate into self-complacency, having this illusion that success comes by readily and can become ignorant of other factors that might have contributed to one’s success. Besides, what does more harm than anything? A complacent and conceited attitude. A self-centered person might act in an insular fashion, unable to showcase magnanimity and contribute to welfare for others. Since no one human beings live isolated, acting complacently might get one being ousted and estranged by other members of the group, which not only leads to further isolation but also failure. Accordingly, a complacent and conceited attitude may hinder one from further success, and may led one to approach future issues with a perfunctory and obnoxious attitude, which may led to downfall.
All told, overall, long-term, realistic goals may do more service to young minds on a long haul. This is definitely not to entirely dismiss the merits of seeking immediate fame and recognition. However, young people should be persuaded and galvanized to pursue long-term, realistic goals, and they need perseverance and courage to achieve them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1002, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY
Message: Use simply 'could'.
...each to the summit of the Mountain. Who could possibly reach the top of Himalayas in one fell ...
Line 3, column 777, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME
Message: Use simply 'period'.
...atching videos that go viral in a short period of time may have successfully gleaned millions ...
Line 4, column 561, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER
Message: Consider replacing "in an insular fashion" with adverb for "insular"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...itude. A self-centered person might act in an insular fashion, unable to showcase magnanimity and con...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, conversely, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 45.0 14.8657303371 303% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 58.6224719101 189% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4906.0 2235.4752809 219% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 914.0 442.535393258 207% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36761487965 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.49840276041 4.55969084622 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8502267959 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 486.0 215.323595506 226% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531728665208 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 1501.2 704.065955056 213% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8878821509 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.594594595 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7027027027 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10810810811 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 10.2758426966 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25037844706 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603977271563 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591657375636 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162267884826 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584166007172 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 272.0 100.480337079 271% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.