A gift (such as camera, a soccer ball, or an animal etc) can contribute to a child’s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.
Present is future-it is a wise cliche using in observing children habitual. The future of kid mostly influenced by toy he used during the childhood period. Some people also said that game played by a kid could be predicted his future life. It is increasingly believed that future is determined since childhood period. Therefore, a camera, given as present, brings further impacts particularly to a child’s development in term of hobby, education, and occupation.
A kid who interested in holding camera must be keen of doing outdoor activity. A kid who is close to camera always tries to find the...
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Sentence: A kid who interested in holding camera must be keen of doing outdoor activity.
Description: The word interested is not usually used as a verb, past tense
Suggestion: A kid who is interested in
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1828 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.724 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.48 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.809 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.255 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
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