Governments make rules to protect people from danger, for example by making people wear seat belts in cars or not allowing smoking in public buildings. However, many people believe there are too many rule nowadays. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In this essay, I shall discuss the profit and obstacles of provide reason policymakers create regulation to safeguard society of the level accidents, so as construct safety first with wear seat belt in cars of forbidden smoking in public areas.
In 2013, the implementation of regulations that banned smoking in communal zone strictly monitored. This is not only prohibition smoking in public area, but also attire seat belt in cars. It is might be disciplined by policymakers for protection of factors accident rider on the highway exactly in Russia. It means the draft federal law “On protected by Public Health from the effects of Tobacco smoke and the consequences of Tobacco Consumption”. Russia Policymakers is practically the heaviest-smoking country in the world. People usually smoke in the most disadvantaged countries. There is, of course, a set of social habits and a certain way of life, but it is already common practice for people all over the world to take care of their health.
Although the most unpleasant thing that this is concern everyone not just smokers, as among as 80% of our people are affected by smoking. Tobacco kills nearly 400,000 people annually.
In Russia, on the other hand, there is several factors accident in this city, that caused by rider less control on high speed with a wet track, thus, obtain accident. It could be fractured spine, disability, and extreme accidents.
Nevertheless, smoking is the one famous of public news that regulated by policymakers in Russia contains contradictive on their instructions. Many societies, who against the ordinance from policymakers for disrupted public area.
Policymakers should be self-interest society, with provide building infrastructure such as area for smoking in each office and public area.
Sentence: In this essay, I shall discuss the profit and obstacles of provide reason policymakers create regulation to safeguard society of the level accidents, so as construct safety first with wear seat belt in cars of forbidden smoking in public areas.
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Sentence: Policymakers should be self-interest society, with provide building infrastructure such as area for smoking in each office and public area.
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Suggestion: Refer to with and provide
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