The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city, in 1950,1970 and 1990. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who use different types of transport to travel or to work in an European city in 1950,1970 and 1990.
As we can see from the diagram, among three different epochs, people were tend to use different transports to travel. Specifically, about 12% city dwellers prefer bus as their tranport in 1950 and in 1970, there were more funs approximately 22%, while two decades later, it decreased at 10%. As for car, from 1950 to 1990, the proportion of tatal travellers is increasing dramatically all the way, and they were 5%, 20%, 30%,respectively. By contrast, bike had an opposite trend from around 22% in 1950 to 13% in 1970 then end up with 6% in 1990. Finally, there were less people like walking to work and about 17 in 100 people walked to work in 1950, then a sharp decline to 8%took place in 1970, while, only 6 in 100 people still kept walking in 1990.
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Sentence: The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who use different types of transport to travel or to work in an European city in 1950,1970 and 1990.
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Sentence: As we can see from the diagram, among three different epochs, people were tend to use different transports to travel.
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Sentence: Specifically, about 12 city dwellers prefer bus as their tranport in 1950 and in 1970, there were more funs approximately 22, while two decades later, it decreased at 10.
Error: tranport Suggestion: transport
Sentence: As for car, from 1950 to 1990, the proportion of tatal travellers is increasing dramatically all the way, and they were 5, 20, 30,respectively.
Error: tatal Suggestion: total
Sentence: By contrast, bike had an opposite trend from around 22 in 1950 to 13 in 1970 then end up with 6 in 1990.
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Sentence: Finally, there were less people like walking to work and about 17 in 100 people walked to work in 1950, then a sharp decline to 8took place in 1970, while, only 6 in 100 people still kept walking in 1990.
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Sentence: The bar chart illustrates the percentage of people who use different types of transport to travel or to work in an European city in 1950,1970 and 1990.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: As we can see from the diagram, among three different epochs, people were tend to use different transports to travel.
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Sentence: Specifically, about 12 city dwellers prefer bus as their tranport in 1950 and in 1970, there were more funs approximately 22, while two decades later, it decreased at 10.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: As for car, from 1950 to 1990, the proportion of tatal travellers is increasing dramatically all the way, and they were 5, 20, 30,respectively.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: By contrast, bike had an opposite trend from around 22 in 1950 to 13 in 1970 then end up with 6 in 1990.
No grammatical errors
Sentence: Finally, there were less people like walking to work and about 17 in 100 people walked to work in 1950, then a sharp decline to 8took place in 1970, while, only 6 in 100 people still kept walking in 1990.
No grammatical errors