In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?
it is seen that recently there are drastic changes in family life style. now in many countries it is seen that people in cities prefer to live in small units rather then living in a combine family system. in my opinion this change has more disadvantages then advantages. this essay will explain importance of extended family system with some personal examples.
It is seen that living in a combine family has a strong effect on upbringing of children. living with elders helps to create a strong family relation. children watch their parents taking care of grandparent and it create a sense...
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Sentence: it is seen that recently there are drastic changes in family life style. now in many countries it is seen that people in cities prefer to live in small units rather then living in a combine family system. in my opinion this change has more disadvantages then advantages. this essay will explain importance of extended family system with some personal examples.
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Sentence: It is seen that living in a combine family has a strong effect on upbringing of children. living with elders helps to create a strong family relation. children watch their parents taking care of grandparent and it create a sense of responsibility and respect in children.
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Need to remove repetitive words or sentences. like 'it is seen...'
Don't forget punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.
Always capitalize the first letter of a sentence.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1380 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.694 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.534 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.954 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.527 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.913 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5