Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums?
Every people need a someplace which can be relax place. Everyday we get busy of our job in house or in office. Sometime, we have free time in Saturday and Monday as weekend. And we are using it for holiday with family or friends. Traveling is great time for people to relax and learn a lot of new knowledge. The most common places that people often visit when they travel are museums.
Museums are essential places for all tourist to visit. Many new knowledge we can get from museums. For example we can learn about culture and history. We can learn everything in there and we can while holiday in there with our family or our friend. Many people who were visited in there, such as student, tourist, other student, etc. for students are visiting museums are giving knowledge for their, and that are one of their lessons. They can learn about history to museums.
Arts center can be a place for studying to student. It is one of knowledge which has significant for us know. If we want know tragedy in past time, we can go to in museums for search the real history, special in Indonesia. When I was junior high school, my teacher usually invited my friends and I to went to museums when weekend. In there we very enjoyed and relaxed to look all the object in there. Our teacher tell to us for writing things that are important. And it will as our lesson in the school when we had history lesson in our class.
Beside that, visiting museums are good way to relax when we go to new areas. Several art of history in there, and we can take it picture if we want it. in museums, we will enjoyment in a lot of treasured work of arts, such as famous painting or sophisticated portrait. For example, most people who visited in museums for holiday with their family or their fried. We can get information and appreciate in that place.
Finally, museums are someplace which has many knowledge about culture and history in there. We can enjoy if we go to there.
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Sentence: We can learn everything in there and we can while holiday in there with our family or our friend.
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Sentence: Many people who were visited in there, such as student, tourist, other student, etc. for students are visiting museums are giving knowledge for their, and that are one of their lessons.
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Sentence: If we want know tragedy in past time, we can go to in museums for search the real history, special in Indonesia.
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Sentence: When I was junior high school, my teacher usually invited my friends and I to went to museums when weekend.
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Sentence: Our teacher tell to us for writing things that are important.
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Sentence: And it will as our lesson in the school when we had history lesson in our class.
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Sentence: Several art of history in there, and we can take it picture if we want it. in museums, we will enjoyment in a lot of treasured work of arts, such as famous painting or sophisticated portrait.
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