The two graphs below show the percentage of smokers and the comsumption of alcohol in litres in selected countries, for period 1960 – 2000.
The two graphs drawn the number of smoking and alcohol comsumption for 1960 – 2000 in several countries. The percentage of smokers decrease every years, but the number of alcohol comsumption increase steadly until 2000.
The first graph illustrate about percentage of population who smoke everyday. In the general number of smoker in USA, Japan, and Holland is decline. The highest percentage is lead of USA about 60% then Japan 47% and the last is Holland at 40%. In 1980, USA experience fall dramatically to 43%, and at the same rate with Japan until 2000. Holland decrease slightly until 20% in 2000.
The second chart show the percentage of alcohol consumption in litres per person start from 1960 until 2000, anrd experience fluctuation every years. Every years, the percentage always increase and reach the top in 1980, that lead by Holland at nearly 11 litres per person then 10 litres in Turkey, and 2 litres in USA. The last two years the percentage of smoker and alcohol comsumption from 1960 until 2000, but there are differences between them. If the first chart always decrease every years, it different with the second chart that fluctuating every years.
Sentence: The two graphs drawn the number of smoking and alcohol comsumption for 1960 2000 in several countries.
Description: The fragment graphs drawn the is rare
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Sentence: The first graph illustrate about percentage of population who smoke everyday.
Description: The fragment graph illustrate about is rare
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Sentence: The second chart show the percentage of alcohol consumption in litres per person start from 1960 until 2000, anrd experience fluctuation every years.
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Sentence: If the first chart always decrease every years, it different with the second chart that fluctuating every years.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
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Sentence: The two graphs drawn the number of smoking and alcohol comsumption for 1960 2000 in several countries.
Error: comsumption Suggestion: consumption
Sentence: The percentage of smokers decrease every years, but the number of alcohol comsumption increase steadly until 2000.
Error: comsumption Suggestion: consumption
Error: steadly Suggestion: steady
Sentence: The second chart show the percentage of alcohol consumption in litres per person start from 1960 until 2000, anrd experience fluctuation every years.
Error: anrd Suggestion: and
Sentence: The last two years the percentage of smoker and alcohol comsumption from 1960 until 2000, but there are differences between them.
Error: comsumption Suggestion: consumption
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Score: 4.5 out of 9
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 195 200
No. of Characters: 942 1000
No. of Different Words: 92 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.831 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.507 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.239 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
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