The barchart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The barchart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of minutes used by three different types of phones by local calls, national and international, and mobiles, in Australia from 2001 to 2008. The units are measured in billions of minutes.

Overall, the number of minutes made by telephone calls over seven year period has increased. The most of Australian have used on local calls. The number of minutes called by mobile phone shows a significant increase within the period by 200% while national and international calls show a stable increase.

In detail, Australian used local phone calls of the same 72 minutes in 2001 and 2008. Australian used almost double the time on local phones than national and international calls. Australian spent 2 minutes on mobile in 2001 whereas they spent 72 minutes on local phones. Until the year 2005, the number of minutes spent on calls has shown the incremental trends. Australian spent 90 minutes on local calls whereas they spent 50 minutes of national and international calls. In 2008, national and international calls, and mobile calls show a steady rise to 61 minutes and 46 minutes, respectively.

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the number of minutes used by three different types of phones by local calls, national and international, and mobiles
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The most of Australian have used on local calls.
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No. of Different Words: 78 100

Don't always use 'Australian' as the subject of the sentences.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 186 200
No. of Characters: 913 1000
No. of Different Words: 78 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.693 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.909 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.515 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.636 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4