The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
The chart illustrate the number of traveler visited abroad from japan between 1985 and 1995 in millions.and second chart gives information about share of Australia in Japanese tourist market in percentage .
In 1985 only 5 million visitor visited in abroad from japan for their holidays and after 1985 Japanese sightseer rage has increased 5% in each year till 1990 .
After that in 1991 their was a unnoticed change in visitors figure.However approximately 12 million vacationer visited to abroad in 1992 and 1950.This trend continue throughout the graph and there was an upswing in 1995 .This is the only year when more number of tourist visited to abroad(15 million).
The next graph shows only 2% Australia part in Japan's tourist Bazaar.then it has continuously increased each year and reach at 5% in 1988.Their was a slight change in share of Australia in japan' market and decreased to 1% in 1890.Moreover From 190-1994 contribution of Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market steeply increased with about 1 % yearly .and again deceased nearly half percentage in 1995.
Overall ,Japanese tourist was traveled more in their present year as compare to past years. and Australia also spent ample of money in japan's tourist market each year .
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The chart illustrate the number
The chart illustrates the number
and second chart gives information about share of Australia
and the second chart gives information about the share of Australia
5 million visitor
5 million visitors
This trend continue
This trend continues
as compare to past years
as compared to past years
Their was a slight change in share of Australia
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