The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

The bar charts illustrate information about how many Japanese visitors were travelled abroad from 1956 to 1995, whereas the line graph provides information about Australia’s share of the Japanese guest market. Units in bar charts are shown in millions, meanwhile line graph is shown in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that Japanese visitors travelling overseas continued to increase throughout the period, whereas the percentage of Japanese who had been visited Australia was remained constant.

Looking first at the data from bar charts, the number of Japanese visitors travelling overseas rose significantly from around 5 millions at the beginning of the period to nearly at about 11 millions in 1990. Starting from 1990, the figure of Japanese travelers declined enormously from 11 millions to approximately 10 millions in 1991. However, from 1991 there was a gradual growth and in 1995 it reached a high just over 15 millions of Japanese travelling abroad.

Regarding the data from the line graph, the number of Japanese visited Australia was increasing gradually from the beginning of the period to nearly at one in twenty. In the period between 1988 to 1989, the percentage dropped slightly to around 4%. Lastly, the percentage of Japanese travelled Australia from 1989 grew dramatically until 1993 with over 6% before fell slightly to 6% by the end of the period.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: CD_DOZENS_OF[1]
Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: '15 million'.
Suggestion: 15 million
...and in 1995 it reached a high just over 15 millions of Japanese travelling abroad. Regard...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, look, regarding, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1172.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30316742081 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84578334243 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 283.868780488 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0045965706 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.222222222 112.824112599 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.23603664747 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266951219363 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119743416355 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762154133772 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187177807611 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663668544584 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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