The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024
The diagrams below give us information about the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The biggest change will be made is about school of building. First, the building will be added one more until the number of all school buildings are three. This new building will be placed in the former of sport field. The sport field will be moved to in front of the new school building. The second change is the car park that will be added as many as one car park on the right side of the new school building. The third change is in front of the old school building 2, will be developed new road that will connect car park, car park 2, sports field, and all site of building. This road separates school and the forest. This new road also still connected with the old road and main entrance. The fourth change is to make integrated between old school building 1 and old school building 2. This change cuts path that before connect between sport field and main entrance but now the path is between new school building 3 and the new connection of school building 1 and school building 2.
Overall, these changes cause many new useful sites of school. As consequence, in 2024, the school will increase the students who study there which are 400 students. In. 2004 the students are just 600 but in 2024 there will be 1000 students can study there.
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Sentence: The sport field will be moved to in front of the new school building.
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Sentence: The third change is in front of the old school building 2, will be developed new road that will connect car park, car park 2, sports field, and all site of building.
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