The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates information about the percentage of the people aged 65 or more in Japan, Sweden, and the USA from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it can clearly be seen that the proportion of elderly people is expected to increase in all three countries to nearly 25% by the year 2040.
To begin with, the percentage of population aged 65 and over stood at 9% for the USA, approximately 7% in Sweden and only 5% in Japan. However, while the percentage of aging people grew to around 15% in western countries in 1990, this figures dropped to 2.5% in Japan for much of the period before rising to almost 5% again at the present time.
In spite of some fluctuations in the expected proportions, the percentage of people aged 65 will possibly continue to rise in the next two decades. Noteworthy is to mention that, dramatic growth is anticipated in Japan between 2030 and 2040. Besides, in future years each three countries will have similar proportion in elderly population
Sentence: However, while the percentage of aging people grew to around 15 in western countries in 1990, this figures dropped to 2.5 in Japan for much of the period before rising to almost 5 again at the present time.
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Sentence: Noteworthy is to mention that, dramatic growth is anticipated in Japan between 2030 and 2040.
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each three countries will have similar proportion
all three countries will have similar proportions
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