You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- Explain why you want to take time off work
- Give details of the amount of time you need
- Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away
Dear Mr. Moon
Hello, I am Darby Shin who is working in your team. I am writing this letter to ask you to allow me some holidays.
Firstly, I will let you know why I need to take some time off work. I have to go to see my father who has been suffering from lung cancer. He will have an operation on 21st, January 2015 in Korea. Therefore, I should go to see my father at that time.
I think that two weeks will be needed in order to stay in Korea because I have to see whether the operation will be done well or not and I ought to look after him for approximately a week. Thus, I need the holidays from 14th to 28th, January.
Mr. Jack who is working in your team as well will take my work while I stay in Korea. Also, when I come back to work, I will work double shifts. Hence, I hope my request will be accepted as soon as possible. Thank you very much for paying attention.
Yours sincerely,
Darby Shin
(08:20)
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Look, a lot of sentences start with subject 'I'.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 10
No. of Words: 184 200
No. of Characters: 701 1000
No. of Different Words: 107 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.683 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.81 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.011 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 29 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 20 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 11 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 11.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.682 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.717 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4