The above charts compare the records of employed women and men in various parts of society in the republic of Fredonia in two years of 1975 and 1995

Essay topics:

The above charts compare the records of employed women and men in various parts of society in the republic of Fredonia in two years of 1975 and 1995.

The charts compare the records of employed women and men in various parts of society in the republic of Fredonia in two years of 1975 and 1995.

Overall, it is clear that although in 1975 more numbers of employees were allocated to men in all 6 groups, the other year women showed to in further amounts in 2 categories of communication and wholesale, retail trade.
In figure one, the one sector which had the higher proportion of both women and men workers was public sector that hired more than 800 and 600 men and women respectively. There were two other parts, wholesale and manufacturing, which devoted near numbers of male worker of 650, but they did not share the same female’s statistics. In fact, wholesale sector had near 600 females, but only 250 women were hired in the other sector. Finally, in other 3 parts worker seemed not to desire to work, where in the public sector, less than 50 women and 200 men wanted to work which was the lowest numbers in the whole graph.

In figure 2, manufacturing and public records did not look different compared to 1975. But in communication, women took apart more than in the other year with 600 numbers and passed the male records. Also, in wholesale part, women reached the 800 numbers where they had only a few differences of 50 workers with males. At the end, although it was obvious that women tried to be in finance or banking sector, slightly less numbers were different from male and women records in 550 numbers.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 418, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun numbers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... in finance or banking sector, slightly less numbers were different from male and wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, look, so, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1222.0 965.302439024 127% => OK
No of words: 261.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68199233716 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45606720484 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498084291188 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 361.8 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0411038809 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.2 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.23603664747 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319031392641 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166903391836 0.103423049105 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.259862882146 0.0843802449381 308% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32875181025 0.15604864568 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.353499536587 0.0819641961636 431% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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