The bar chart below shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.

The given bar graph represents the participation of younger in selected pastime exercise in Australia.
Here, the participants are 5 to 14-year-old. Boys take part more than girls in skateboarding (40℅), bike riding (70℅), electric and computer games (80℅). However, boys are less participate in art and craft, it is only 40℅. While, boys and girls are similar in watching TV and videos (100℅).
On the other side, girls are partake in art and craft(60℅) more than other activities. On contrary, they have less interest in activities such as skateboarding (30℅), bike riding (50℅), electronic and computer games(50℅). In addition, girls have highest interest in watching TV and videos (100℅) in their leisure time.
Overall, girls do less activities than boys in their free time. But, they both have interested in watching TV and videos. Meanwhile, boys are participated more in activities such as skateboarding, bike riding, electronic and computer games, when girls are partake more in art and craft related exercise.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 30, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'partaken'.
Suggestion: partaken
...eos 100℅. On the other side, girls are partake in art and craft60℅ more than other act...
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Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the highest'.
Suggestion: have the highest
...d computer games50℅. In addition, girls have highest interest in watching TV and videos 100℅...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 19, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun activities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...their leisure time. Overall, girls do less activities than boys in their free time...
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Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'partaken'.
Suggestion: partaken
...onic and computer games, when girls are partake more in art and craft related exercise....
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 305, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...more in art and craft related exercise.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, while, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33950617284 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90313176739 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6231860989 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6363636364 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7272727273 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128542979508 0.215688989381 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552686701317 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688190390095 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107062945924 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846009066419 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.3012195122 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.1 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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