The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.

Essay topics:

The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.

This bar chart illustrate the the leisure activities children between age of 5 to 14 years old do in Australia. the activities are (skate boarding bike riding watching tv/videos electronic/computer game art and craft)
overall as you can see the boy participate in these activities more than girls except watching tv/video games that is equal for both of them and then there is art and craft activity almost by half the girl participate more.
The percentage of boys and girls watching tv is equally %100 the boys in this activities(skate boarding bike riding electronic computer ) participate more that girls the percentage are boys %40, over %70 %80)the girls(almost %30, %60, over %60).
the percentage of girl participating in art and art and craft is well above %50 and boys above %30 the girl participate in this activity almost by half

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...%80the girlsalmost %30, %60, over %60. the percentage of girl participating in art...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 698.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 140.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98571428571 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99468917674 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.7869321553 43.030603864 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.5 112.824112599 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 22.9334400587 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.23603664747 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20738809424 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156292108739 0.103423049105 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12952421627 0.0843802449381 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138176047091 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958641536541 0.0819641961636 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.2329268293 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 61.2550243902 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.4329268293 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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