The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

given is bar graph comparing the percentage of excercise between Australians’ men and women in 2010. Overall, it can be clearly seen that, the percentage of female doing regular physical activity in different age group were higher than that of male. In addition, the trend of both sex experienced an increase and a decrease.

So clearly did the figure have that, firstly, the percentage of physical activity on men were higher than that of women, accounting for 52.8 % and 47.7% respectively in 15 to 24 age groups. However, the age group from 25-34 to 55-64 in female were higher than that of male. Additionally, in group 65 age, there were similar-percentage both gender, counting to over 45%.

Turning to the trend of both sex axis. First, the trend of Australians’ male dropped extremely to 39.5% in 35 to 44 age group from the firs men’ age group. Afterwards, in 65 age and over, it rose steadily to about 47 %. Meanwhile, the trend of Australian’ girls inclined gradually from 47% to around 53% in 45 to 54 age group. Following the last age group, the percentage of girl fallen approximately 48%.

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Average: 9 (3 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Given
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 937.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93157894737 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12082620577 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584210526316 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 279.0 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1416911938 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1818181818 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2727272727 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347766450548 0.215688989381 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126240569666 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088785038599 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250116487071 0.15604864568 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657105060939 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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