The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The chart illustrates the proportion of the exercise frequency of Australian male and female with six age categories in the year 2010.
it is noticeable that the majority of males, particularly teenagers do more exercise. Overall, female do the most physical activity between 45 to 54.
it could be clearly seen that the age group between 15 to 24 years of male and female have 52.8% and 47.7 respectively. Then, the age group of 35 to 44 dropped dramatically to 39.5% which was the lowest percentage in all groups, whereas female rose to 52.5% rapidly.
With 45 to 54 years, the circumstance of percentage distance was increased softly, it was 53.3%, which is the highest proportion for six age groups, while the percentage of male was increased slightly to 43.1%. And lastly, the proportion of two gender over 65 years was the most closed, 46.7% for male and 47.1 for female.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
lastly, so, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 732.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84768211921 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74119392172 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569536423841 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 214.2 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8517912044 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139706448435 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661418944558 0.103423049105 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494352783545 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0901579930339 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407497055232 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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