The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below illustrate the daily physical activities of Australian people in different age groups by the percentage in 2010.

Overall, we can see that the percentage of male from age group 15 to 24 is bigger than the percentage of female while the percentage of female in other groups is bigger than rate of male group.

At the beginning of the period, from 15 to 24 age group, the percentage was fell gradually then from the middle of the period was rose gradually. The age group from 35 to 44 was hit a low at 39.5 percent while the age class from 15 to 24 was hit a peak at 52.8 percent. A t the end of the period, the percent of the male was hit a middle at 46.7.

On the other hand, from the beginning of the period, the percentage of female group was rose then declined. By the middle of the period the rate of female group was hit a peak at 53.3, and hit a low at the end of the period at 47.1 percent.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 746.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.12154696133 4.92477711251 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3023498851 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 69.0 106.607317073 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.381215469613 0.547539520022 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 225.0 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 27.4676577491 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1666666667 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202372500743 0.215688989381 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155245089187 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.18480604289 0.0843802449381 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208862556003 0.15604864568 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.205569140614 0.0819641961636 251% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 74.87 61.2550243902 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.21 11.4140731707 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.35 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 14.0 40.7170731707 34% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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